tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post2532383121484516552..comments2023-06-24T03:33:29.854-07:00Comments on Summer Haiku 2009: Stolen flowersRachel Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-48561483104105416102009-07-25T17:30:09.074-07:002009-07-25T17:30:09.074-07:00I so love this poem!I so love this poem!Yansidarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02007225601887200129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-4291038376197253842009-06-30T10:36:48.775-07:002009-06-30T10:36:48.775-07:00A nostalgic look at the days of innocence. Were we...A nostalgic look at the days of innocence. Were we able to turn back the hands of time, we'll see us there, maybe the mother, the child... It's haibunic in a sense because of the "hidden" title. Nice.Vic Gendranohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17049390356721305659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-53223937793789719262009-06-30T02:57:42.856-07:002009-06-30T02:57:42.856-07:00I missed this earlier, very good and interestingly...I missed this earlier, very good and interestingly 'edgy' as Alan commented.Beatrice Vhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09492224274542764248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-35735179044205644902009-06-29T03:00:23.856-07:002009-06-29T03:00:23.856-07:00I must admit I didn't notice the headnote or t...I must admit I didn't notice the <b>headnote</b> or <b>title</b> of <i>"Stolen flowers"</i><br /><br />The poem was good enough without this, but makes it all the more intriguing if boy or man stole the flowers from a shop, funeral service, or gravesite.<br /><br /><i>stolen flowers–<br />from his pocket<br />"for you mom"</i><br /><br />Now you have two different versions. I find this a very edgy poem which many good haiku are.<br /><br />Each version is your poem by the way, so if you decide to either or both poems into different magazines or competitions, they are rightfully your's. ;-)<br /><br />Alan<br /><b><a href="http://www.withwords.org.uk" rel="nofollow">With Words</a></b>Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-47285940026141666752009-06-28T19:25:26.376-07:002009-06-28T19:25:26.376-07:00Aren't those the best of all?Aren't those the best of all?diana l.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12508598285292827626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-17553518285919065432009-06-27T06:25:02.890-07:002009-06-27T06:25:02.890-07:00I like the touch of 'yugen' mystery in thi...I like the touch of 'yugen' mystery in this.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-49203074502039597032009-06-27T05:48:19.437-07:002009-06-27T05:48:19.437-07:00Terrific, Andromeda! I miss those days...Terrific, Andromeda! I miss those days...norahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02228725106863747984noreply@blogger.com