tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post7063614410007857723..comments2023-06-24T03:33:29.854-07:00Comments on Summer Haiku 2009: Rachel Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-89249155128968428262009-06-19T21:46:42.416-07:002009-06-19T21:46:42.416-07:00I liked all of those words, and really enjoy your ...I liked all of those words, and really enjoy your interpretations, Vic!diana l.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12508598285292827626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-69802832095077359212009-06-19T10:57:08.807-07:002009-06-19T10:57:08.807-07:00I like the words deserted and old here - aloneness...I like the words deserted and old here - aloneness and advanced age finally rewarded with a glimmer of hope.Vic Gendranohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17049390356721305659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-29761549824462219122009-06-19T09:49:18.227-07:002009-06-19T09:49:18.227-07:00.
I really like the use of 'succumbs'; it&....<br />I really like the use of '<i><b>succumbs</b></i>'; it's a well-judged choice of verb that adds layers of possible meanings and happenstances.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-30326464197267369992009-06-19T05:01:27.371-07:002009-06-19T05:01:27.371-07:00Yippeee...Thx, Alan! I think it really works and m...Yippeee...Thx, Alan! I think it really works and makes the image much stronger..Wahyu W. Basjirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04260428377205211034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2659026536331999061.post-30406879815537650582009-06-19T04:39:53.570-07:002009-06-19T04:39:53.570-07:00I really like this.
I wonder if an indefinite ar...I really like this. <br /><br />I wonder if an indefinite article might work?<br /><br /><i>deserted park--<br />a wooden bench succumbs<br />to the moonlight</i><br /><br />.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com