I like it, Rachel!
Thank you Nora :)
.Cornflower blues is terrific!!!! Actually the entire haiku is terrific!As haiku come from the incomplete verse called hokku, I don't think you need all those full stops (periods).Your writing is so clear, and tightly done, it gives a nod to the reader where to pause e.g.cool windssough along the tree linecornflower bluesorcool windssough along the tree line...cornflower bluesRegardless of my comments, this is a great haiku, every word choice is spot on!!!!Alan
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I like it, Rachel!
Thank you Nora :)
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Cornflower blues is terrific!!!!
Actually the entire haiku is terrific!
As haiku come from the incomplete verse called hokku, I don't think you need all those full stops (periods).
Your writing is so clear, and tightly done, it gives a nod to the reader where to pause e.g.
cool winds
sough along the tree line
cornflower blues
or
cool winds
sough along the tree line...
cornflower blues
Regardless of my comments, this is a great haiku, every word choice is spot on!!!!
Alan
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