Summer Haiku 2009

Thursday, June 18, 2009

summer's warm breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice

diana l. said...: A lovely sadness. Again, the power is in the simplicity.; June 18, 2009
Area 17 said...: Wonderful.

I don't feel you need to state the word 'summer':

warm breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice

.; June 20, 2009
Vic Gendrano said...: Alan and Nora,

Another suggested first line:

summer breeze

A wistful and WARM longing of a not so secret desire to reconnect with a loved one...; June 24, 2009
Area 17 said...: Dear Vic,

Yes, I like your new first line!

'summer's' and 'warm' was too much, but your new version is even better than my suggestion! ;-)

summer breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice

I think that captures perfectly what you say in your prose statement.

Another winner! ;-)

.; June 24, 2009