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Thursday, June 18, 2009


summer's warm breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice


4 comments:

diana l. said...

A lovely sadness. Again, the power is in the simplicity.

Alan Summers said...

Wonderful.

I don't feel you need to state the word 'summer':


warm breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice


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Vic Gendrano said...

Alan and Nora,

Another suggested first line:

summer breeze

A wistful and WARM longing of a not so secret desire to reconnect with a loved one...

Alan Summers said...

Dear Vic,

Yes, I like your new first line!

'summer's' and 'warm' was too much, but your new version is even better than my suggestion! ;-)

summer breeze
wanting to hear again
my name in your voice


I think that captures perfectly what you say in your prose statement.

Another winner! ;-)

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