I love the colloquial 'yanking'. Great tight haiku!
I hesitated over it, but I thought it gave the right amount of physicality and emotion. :-)
Straight direct language, and colloguisms where appropriate make a haiku. You made a good choice, and I'd say 'yanking' is a key part of the poem which something like 'pulling' wouldn't work on so many levels.
well done norajohn
I like it, too. (This year, with all of the rain in my area, I've almost forgotten how much "yanking" I normally have to do when weeding...)
I can identify with this one.
Very good, Nora. I think 'yanking' has great emotional weight here, it connects well with the last line.
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I love the colloquial 'yanking'.
Great tight haiku!
I hesitated over it, but I thought it gave the right amount of physicality and emotion. :-)
Straight direct language, and colloguisms where appropriate make a haiku.
You made a good choice, and I'd say 'yanking' is a key part of the poem which something like 'pulling' wouldn't work on so many levels.
well done nora
john
I like it, too. (This year, with all of the rain in my area, I've almost forgotten how much "yanking" I normally have to do when weeding...)
I can identify with this one.
Very good, Nora. I think 'yanking' has great emotional weight here, it connects well with the last line.
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