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Tuesday, July 14, 2009

afternoon break
warm air behind the shop
filled with honeysuckle
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2 comments:

jem said...

I like this one - very atmospheric - the feel and the smell of warm air.

July 15, 2009
Area 17 said...

Sublimely simple and atmospheric.

I'd only suggest you make the verb more 'immediate present tense'.

afternoon break
warm air behind the shop
filled with honeysuckle


afternoon break
warm air behind the shop
fills with honeysuckle

A truly wonderful haiku!!!

Alan

July 16, 2009

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