I like "orphan", but "slithers" sounds a bit sinister. Is that what you intended?
Really like this and the dynamics between "orphan" and "slithers" is wonderful! ;-)Alan
an orphan leaf crawls away in the moonlight
evening winda leaf crawls away
I love Martin's version as well, I feel really spoiled with both poems. What luxury. ;-)
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I like "orphan", but "slithers" sounds a bit sinister. Is that what you intended?
Really like this and the dynamics between "orphan" and "slithers" is wonderful! ;-)
Alan
an orphan leaf crawls away in the moonlight
evening wind
a leaf crawls away
I love Martin's version as well, I feel really spoiled with both poems. What luxury. ;-)
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