Hi Rachel,Really nice. ;-)I don't think you need all the adjectives.tiny flowersand caterpillarsamong fennel's liquorice leaves As fennel are liquorice(ish) you can leave that out (it's unsaid in negative space) and "among" makes both the last line over long and detracts from what is a really good haiku. ;-)Consider starting with fennel and zoom into the details and the keen observational magic is better emphasised. I've really enjoyed reading this poem!!!fennel leaves the tiny flowersand caterpillars.
Thank you Alan.You're teaching me a great deal. Thank you.
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