Summer Haiku 2009

Monday, July 27, 2009

wind through the trees -
the ragged edge
of a blackbird's song

Area 17 said...: Wow, I love this! ;-); July 28, 2009
diana l. said...: Me, too! (especially the "ragged edge"); July 28, 2009
Area 17 said...: But is good about this haiku is all the lines work together, with perfect choice of words.

That first line really sets up the rest of the poem, without it I don't think even the ragged edge would be so strong, but be diluted.

This is simple but fine (plain language) craftship [sic].

That first line is wonderful, and then is followed by a phrase part of the haiku that not only is made 'better' by the first line, but gives more layers to the already excellent and atmospheric first line.

Fantastic poem! ;-)

Alan; July 29, 2009