Hi Damien,Love your haiku! The French original looks better and I think the English version needs to move away from being a direct translation:August evening -a cool beer by looking forthe Great Bearaugust evening -a cool beer for lookingat the Great Bearall my best,AlanWith Words Online Haiku Competition Results.
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Hi Damien,
Love your haiku!
The French original looks better and I think the English version needs to move away from being a direct translation:
August evening -
a cool beer by looking for
the Great Bear
august evening -
a cool beer for looking
at the Great Bear
all my best,
Alan
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