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Friday, August 7, 2009

clutch of crows
rest in the iris blue shadows
of twilight --
mad dog heat

2 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Hi Kelly,

clutch of crows
rest in the iris blue shadows
of twilight --
mad dog heat


Is this iris this sort?

iris weblink: Blue Eyed Blonde Intermediate Bearded Iris

I think the last line might be a bit too much?

e.g.

clutch of crows
in the iris blue shadows
of twilight


to maybe...

clutch of crows
in the iris shadows
of twilight


?????


.

Kelly Marszycki said...

Well, Alan, I'll consider your suggestion. I'm new at this and may be a bit too verbose? It's often hard to whittle down to the simple essense of the thing itself --