I really like this!You do have a typo so I hope you come back to correct it. ;-)e.g. morning drivea single raindrop drifts slowlydown the windshieldAlthough you don't need 'single' I rather like it for the rhythm of the piece..
Alan, I did and thank you ;)
Can't see the correction yet, but looking forward to it as this is a gooooooooooood haiku. ;-)Don't forget to consider the indefinite article, and to correct the spelling of winshield to windshield. ;-)morning drivea single raindrop drifts slowlydown the windshield.
Lovely Reihaisha, your haiku are showing a lovely growth and maturity, it is as if all of a sudden they blossomed in a special way this spring. Hope you will be sending some fo the anthology.
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I really like this!
You do have a typo so I hope you come back to correct it. ;-)
e.g.
morning drive
a single raindrop drifts slowly
down the windshield
Although you don't need 'single' I rather like it for the rhythm of the piece.
.
Alan, I did and thank you ;)
Can't see the correction yet, but looking forward to it as this is a gooooooooooood haiku. ;-)
Don't forget to consider the indefinite article, and to correct the spelling of winshield to windshield. ;-)
morning drive
a single raindrop drifts slowly
down the windshield
.
Lovely Reihaisha, your haiku are showing a lovely growth and maturity, it is as if all of a sudden they blossomed in a special way this spring. Hope you will be sending some fo the anthology.
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