Summer Haiku 2009: Stolen flowers

Saturday, June 27, 2009

a crumpled blossom
comes from his pocket -
"for you mom"

Andromeda Jazmon

nora said...: Terrific, Andromeda! I miss those days...; June 27, 2009
Area 17 said...: I like the touch of 'yugen' mystery in this.; June 27, 2009
diana l. said...: Aren't those the best of all?; June 28, 2009
Area 17 said...: I must admit I didn't notice the headnote or title of "Stolen flowers"

The poem was good enough without this, but makes it all the more intriguing if boy or man stole the flowers from a shop, funeral service, or gravesite.

stolen flowers–
from his pocket
"for you mom"

Now you have two different versions. I find this a very edgy poem which many good haiku are.

Each version is your poem by the way, so if you decide to either or both poems into different magazines or competitions, they are rightfully your's. ;-)

Alan
With Words; June 29, 2009
Beatrice V said...: I missed this earlier, very good and interestingly 'edgy' as Alan commented.; June 30, 2009
Vic Gendrano said...: A nostalgic look at the days of innocence. Were we able to turn back the hands of time, we'll see us there, maybe the mother, the child... It's haibunic in a sense because of the "hidden" title. Nice.; June 30, 2009
Yansidara said...: I so love this poem!; July 25, 2009