Summer Haiku 2009

Wednesday, June 10, 2009

sun shines weakly
horse chestnut leaves waggle
over a red bus

Dennis Tomlinson said...: I wanted to write a London haiku!; June 10, 2009
Area 17 said...: And you did! Love to see more. Please! ;-)

Can I suggest an edited version of the first line?

I think the last two lines are fantastic! A blaze of colour and sound!!!

weak sunshine
horse chestnut leaves waggle
over a red bus

.; June 10, 2009
Reihaisha said...: what is a waggle?; June 10, 2009
Area 17 said...: It's "chestnut leaves" waggle, and the definition of waggle (as a verb): waggle

Now it's a pity you can't drink waggle dance which is a bitter. ;-); June 10, 2009
Dennis Tomlinson said...: Thanks for your appreciation, Alan. And your emendation places a stronger emphasis on the funny 'waggling' of the leaves in the second line.; June 11, 2009