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Friday, July 3, 2009

early morning
pulling weeds and deadheading shrubs
to center myself
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4 comments:

diana l. said...

So you use gardening in this way, too!
Very nice.

(How about replacing "and" with a comma and "to" with "I"? Although I think that neither of these suggestions is very traditional haiku...yet I like the way they sound:))

July 03, 2009
Area 17 said...

My version:

early morning
I pull weeds and deadhead shrubs
to center myself


Diana's version:

early morning
pulling weeds, deadheading shrubs
I center myself

I definitely prefer Diana's version!

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July 03, 2009
Reihaisha said...

after the last few weeks I had, I needed to destress badly.

I was focusing on the acts of gardening not myself. That is why I did not use "I" in the third line. I do like Diana's second line though....

July 03, 2009
diana l. said...

Thanks. I was thinking the same thing about the "I". It sort of imports the west into the east, doesn't it?

July 04, 2009

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