good onejohn
.Wonderful, fresh and unique!!!!I don't feel you need an upper case letter after the colon, unless you mean the Blackberry cellphone?payment for yesterday's sun:blackberry flowers are whiterthan today's clouds I absolutely adore this haiku!.
Lovely!
Wouldn’t – blackberry flowers whiter than today’s clouds – be enough?
.Martin could be right, I was just thinking of the middle line being longer so e.g.payment for yesterday's sun:blackberry flowers whiter than today’s clouds???.
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good one
john
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Wonderful, fresh and unique!!!!
I don't feel you need an upper case letter after the colon, unless you mean the Blackberry cellphone?
payment for yesterday's sun:
blackberry flowers are whiter
than today's clouds
I absolutely adore this haiku!
.
Lovely!
Wouldn’t – blackberry flowers whiter than today’s clouds – be enough?
.
Martin could be right, I was just thinking of the middle line being longer so e.g.
payment for yesterday's sun:
blackberry flowers whiter
than today’s clouds
???
.
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