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5 am

across the deer park
patches of mist –
the ghosts of dawn

4 comments:

jem said...

Nice one - that last line is a treat!

Alan Summers said...

I agree with jem! ;-)

across the deer park
patches of mist –
the ghosts of dawn


You could make "across the deer park" into a pivot line?

e.g.

the ghosts of dawn
across the deer park
patches of mist


or

patches of mist
across the deer park
the ghosts of dawn



Alan

diana l. said...

Just beautiful, David!

John McDonald said...

very good David
john