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Wednesday, August 5, 2009

humidity
trailing from clouds above
to dark yews
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2 comments:

Area 17 said...

Wow, "dark yews" is a great line!

Something so simple, just two words, yet it has more than one layer of meaning.

You should consider that as the opening line, it's wonderful!

humidity
trailing from clouds above
to dark yews


dark yews
the humidity trailing
from cloud to cloud

?

August 05, 2009
Dennis Tomlinson said...

Thanks, Alan. I did specify the yews rather than trees in general because of the association with churchyards - maybe a sad note in summer! I felt the humidity coming down onto me from the sky, maybe like this:

dark yews
the humidity trailing
from clouds to earth

August 05, 2009

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