Hi Yansidara,Love it, but not sure the format does your original poem justice.Maybe something along the lines of...another sundaythe one hundred degrees heatof far away thunder??Alan
Thank you Alan for your observations. I do take your suggestions seriusly. Thank you again.
I seriously meant "seriously"
.another version:far away thunderone hundred degrees heatof sunday.
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Hi Yansidara,
Love it, but not sure the format does your original poem justice.
Maybe something along the lines of...
another sunday
the one hundred degrees heat
of far away thunder
??
Alan
Thank you Alan for your observations. I do take your suggestions seriusly. Thank you again.
I seriously meant "seriously"
.
another version:
far away thunder
one hundred degrees heat
of sunday
.
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